Creative Writing and unfinished business…
April 18, 2014 § 6 Comments
swallows arrive early
noisily chasing gnats
not yet born
Tagged: haiku, poetry, swallows
Few people in their lifetime will be privileged to write a more exquisite haiku. Very nice work, indeed, Rachel!
Thank you, Ron. It doesn’t feel quite right to me, but so glad you liked it. 🙂
Lovely haiku, and the image matches beautifully conjuring memories of past swallow squadrons 🙂
Thank you! The swallows really have come early here too. It always cheers me 🙂
That middle line, “noisily chasing gnats” is just fun to say out loud. Again, an excellent haiku that captures the beauty of nature.
Thanks, Miranda. Those three words almost get caught on the tongue. A bottle of wine would have made that a certainty! Have a peaceful and happy Easter. x
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