tidal

April 19, 2014 § 7 Comments

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 spring tide tumbles in –

washing yesterday’s squabble

deep into the sea

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§ 7 Responses to tidal

  • Miranda Stone says:

    So much left unsaid with this haiku/story, leaving the reader to wonder about the squabble. But I love how it illustrates the cleansing properties and rejuvenation of the sea.

    • Rachael Charmley says:

      Thanks, Miranda. What you say hadn’t occurred to me, but it adds a dimension which I really, really like. Thank you again for your insightful thinking my friend 🙂

  • pi314chron says:

    With all due respect to Miranda, the best haiku do NOT provide the resolution she seems to desire but seek to leave such resolution to the reader. That a really excellent haiku is “open-ended” rather than drawn to a close is accepted by most haiku authorities as “de rigueur.” Exquisite work, Rachael! 🙂

    Ron

    • Rachael Charmley says:

      Thank you Ron for your thoughtful comments. Writing haiku well is not easy. How to get it ‘just right’ – or ‘right enough’ to create the desired effect? 🙂

  • What a delicious haiku, the unknown but universal squabble washed clean by that beautiful ocean….gorgeous illustrating photo too 🙂

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