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May 16, 2014 § 8 Comments

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discussing divorce

over Pinot Grigio –

as the pasta burns

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  • pi314chron says:

    Yes! Perfect in every way! A marriage burning down as the pasta burns — this one has everything all bundled up in a tight little ball of wonder! Brravo, Rachael!

    Ron

  • Nice symbolism, Rachael, and I like the idea of your characters remaining ‘civilised’ whilst everything around them is crumbling.

    • Rachael Charmley says:

      That’s what I was trying for, Chris. I’ve been fiddling with this one for weeks. And, as ever, thank you 🙂

  • SirenaTales says:

    Searing…and I love the take Chris has. Terrific and trenchant contrast about the civilized “discussion” over the stems of Pinot Grigio as the emotional truth scorches below. Hope all is well with you, my friend! xxo

    • Rachael Charmley says:

      Ha! Thank you for taking the time to comment so positively. Sometimes the simplest haiku take the longest to get even half right!
      All well here. I’m on my own for a couple of days and am enjoying pleasing myself, reading and sleeping 🙂

  • Miranda Stone says:

    I agree with Chris as well. I love how you describe such a devastating experience taking place among the mundane of everyday life. Its understated tone makes the poem all the more powerful. Fantastic writing, Rachael!

    • Rachael Charmley says:

      Thank you. I had a vision of a ‘civilised’ couple pretending that everything was fine as their world crashed about their ears. Very English. Very clipped. Very to the point.
      Pleased it worked for you, Miranda.

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