Creative Writing and unfinished business…
May 17, 2014 § 4 Comments
speckled trout circles
inside the sunlit shallows
a water rat
Photo courtesy Kyoko Imazu
Tagged: haiku, poetry, trout, water rat
Beautiful sound and motion caught in words Rachael
Thank you my dear friend.
Perfect! As greenmackenzie said, you do a fantastic job of catching the motion through your words. Again, you create the best kind of haiku here by first portraying a calm peaceful scene, and then with a plop, it’s all disturbed by the water rat! (Love that illustration as well!)
Thank you, Miranda! This changing of energy in the the last line really seems to make the difference to the quality of the haiku. It’s like an ‘eye blink’ !
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