Creative Writing and unfinished business…
June 12, 2014 § 8 Comments
in the place i was born –
brighter than before
Painting courtesy Kay Smith
Tagged: haiku, poetry, recollection, roses
Rachael, Stunner of an image–love those drenched colors–to match a lovely verse! Funny how something so simple and succinct as “roses bloom” can still take one’s breath away with its powerful loveliness. Thank you, as always. You make my day bloom brighter than before. xox
Hmmm. I was so struck by that image and your first line, and misled by the setup in my Reader, that the title of the poem didn’t register for me till I was closing out the window after commenting above. “Vita” adds another layer of complexity here….I stand by my comment above, especially the last line :)….
Haa! I was going for the enigmatic mood with this one. Maybe I overdid it a bit 🙂 I liked the title tho ‘cos it added a further twist. And, as always, thank you for your encouragement, my friend.xxx
Not overdone at all–I just missed part of it the first go ’round. xox
Là où je suis née
Les roses fleurissent
Plus éclatantes qu’autrefois
each person (including “me”) is very important in this world!
and roses know that very well 🙂
Yes. And thank you. 🙂
Again, you do an excellent job of ending your haiku with an unexpected twist. We think of the life force fading as time goes by, whether it be the energy in our bodies, or those of other animals and plants. But you end this with a resurgence of life, with the roses being brighter than they were at the time of your birth. Well, that’s the way I read it anyway. 😉 Love and hugs, friend!
Ha! Thank you. Very often I don’t understand why I write what I do – but I trust anyway, and with this haiku there were so many ways it could be interpreted. I love the way you have brought this one to life. Such beauty of perception. Big hugs, Miranda:-)
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