Creative Writing and unfinished business…
July 6, 2014 § 2 Comments
in the torpid evening air
the empty hammock –
Image courtesy Jeffrey Becom
Tagged: haiku, hammock, poetry
Maybe I’m reading this in an odd way, or bringing my own associations to it, but I find something strangely eerie in the image you’ve painted here, Rachael. It never fails to amaze me how so few words can evoke such powerful emotions. Beautifully written, my friend.
No, you’re right. I intended to create an undercurrent of menace. By using ‘torpid’ and ‘lazily’ I gave character that probably couldn’t exist. If I had substituted ‘snake’ or ‘lizard’ for ‘hammock’ then the haiku would have lacked tension but would have made more logical sense. That’s my take on it, anyway!
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