Creative Writing and unfinished business…
September 19, 2014 § 15 Comments
scorch in the hot sun –
Tagged: creative writing, haiku, maple, poetry, scorched
Maple trees are my favorites in the fall.
Yes. I think they’re one of mine too. All those different colours…
Absolutely classic juxtaposition, and the appeal to one’s sense of feeling, smell, and taste is incomparable. Bravo!
And sight! How could I have omitted the implied visual appearance of scorched (shriveled) maple leaves! 😛
Thank you. I’m so pleased you liked it! I wasn’t sure about this one – it seemed vaguely mediocre…
You never can tell 🙂
Wonderful as usual – great perception here, Rachael.
Thanks, Laine. Have a productive and peaceful weekend 🙂
Okay, this is just brilliant. That comparison of scorched maple leaves with burnt sugar is striking, Rachael. Well done! And wonderful accompanying photo as well. 🙂
Thank you. One of the maple trees in my back yard always shrivels up – well its leaves do! It’s a delicate little soul and needs more TLC than I can give 😦
I’m with the lovely Miranda–brilliant! Shriveling and scorching, sugar burning–this one shimmers the senses. Thank you. Xx
Thank you xxx
I love the word “shrivel” – the final line “burnt sugar” made me think of a shrub the name of which is “caramel tree”… ah, delicious haiku dear Rachael! Have a nice and sugary week-end :-)♥
I hoped that word would appeal to you! I’m looking for some themes to inspire haiku just now. Perhaps food… 🙂
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Thank you, Kismet! 🙂
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