seed
October 15, 2014 § 23 Comments
each violent gust
blows more dandelion seeds
into the unknown
~
Image courtesy John Lund/Riser/Getty Images
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Perhaps. Perhaps not. Elegant haiku in any case! 🙂
Elegant I like, dear Ron! Thank you 😉
We love Dandelions 🙂
Umm, me too. I took some photos you might like of hundreds of them on a bank a few weeks back. A real picture, they were. Pity I couldn’t fit them around the haiku I had in mind. 🙂
Lovely, Rachael. For some reason, I have also been reading this starting with the first line, followed by the last line, finishing with the middle–also cool :). xoxo
I like it that way to, Chloe: first, last, then middle (minus ‘blows’). It adds a tension that wasn’t there in my hastily written version! Thank you for your input xxxxx
And so our journey through life should be. Great words, Rachael.
Yes, yes and yes! Thank you, Chris.
Blowing on dendelions… A child’s game we’re still dreaming of… I like the sonority of “unknown” much softer than the french “inconnu” – Do you know that “dendelion” has french roots, it means “dent-de-lion”, lion teeth… the french modern word is awful, pissenlit – and morever, vulgar by the meaning… but your poem is beautiful as ever!
I chose ‘unknown’ as it is not a word that ends abruptly. It can whisper on as long as the breath lasts…
I knew of the modern french (slang?) word; it is much too crude for such a beautiful plant. ‘Dent-de-lion’ I like very much, as it transforms its modern persona into something much more noble and dynamic. Thank you Frederic. xxx
Beautiful thought! Love it.
Thank you. 🙂 ❤
My Pleasure. 🙂
Love it. I have always had a strange liking for dandelions (the wine’s not bad either) 🙂 and that may be it. Bring to mind:
“Blowing on the Wind”
‘And the answer my friend, is…’ 🙂
So it is, it is…:-)
Thought you’d know the reference, good one for this old tumbleweed. 😉
Beautiful once more 🙂 FYI – I nominated you for the One Lovely Blog Award. There is a special tab on my blog for it. I don’t know if you do these or not (my first, probably last time) but I have a link there that will bring readers to your blog.
My dear Laine, thank you for the honour, which I really do not deserve. There are much more deserving and talented poets than me on this extraordinary platform of WordPress! I did accept the first couple of awards when I started blogging last autumn, but these days I would find it difficult to make a list of so many poets and writers I truly admire and respect that I have not already awarded to! I’m sure they’re out there – I just haven’t found them yet 🙂
Thank you, my talented friend. I do appreciate you thinking of me xxx
Your welcome Rachael. I will try most anything once – but honestly this was a lot of work. I created a page so that readers can at least have the opportunity to click on your blog link if curious. Have a good night 🙂
You’re right – it is a lot of work, particularly to those such as myself who are not particularly computer literate! I think the awards are a lovely idea for newcomers to help them feel valued and part of the community, and to make them more visible, but I am happy to let my blog grow organically – waxing and waning as it will. Good to have you as part of my community – you are such a gift 🙂
🙂
Ooh, I like the way Chloe is reading this one. I also like to read it as third line, first line, second line. (But then that messes up the classic haiku structure.) A powerful image you’ve painted with your words, Rachael!
Thank you! Pick and mix time 🙂