February 6, 2016 § 4 Comments

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beneath leafless trees

on frozen soil

unwanted feather



Image courtesy Yukio Kondo

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§ 4 Responses to midwinter

  • This has all the beautiful loneliness of winter in it Rachael.

  • mark says:

    I like the way the focus becomes smaller through the trees to the ground and then finally zooming into the feather.
    It’s really beautiful and also sad.
    Although I only say sad because of the inclusion of the word ‘unwanted’, it definitely moves the reader in a certain direction and becomes a totally different image than without that word.
    It’s fascinating how much difference one word can make, or indeed how much time someone like me can spend thinking about it.
    Sorry, I can’t help it.

    • Rachael says:

      Thanks, Mark. Your comments are really useful. The main reason I like the haiku medium is that each word has a job to do and is vital. For the same reason I am drawn to flash fiction and very short stories. 🙂

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